Dargquon Ql'deleodna

this actually happened to her, both one of her good freinds and her boyfreind (from what i inferered, read her other poem it talks about this somthing like notice me ...

this is really cool, keep it up, i like the beginning. kinda creepy though

this is a nice beginning, cool plot and story line.

wow.... that sucks.... sorry to hear that....

nice poem, happy ending depressing type beginning, good job. one question, is this based on an event in your life......

dude, its not over, hes gonna post more too it, he is probably posting it as he is weriting it.

this kinda sounds allot like LOTR because of the last stand agains the huge horde of death.... but i thought it was good, but it was just a jumble of ...

wow, very very cool beginning, he is now in hell, cuz he's dead, i like this story it for some odd reason puts happier thoughts in my head.... oh whell ...

hmm... interesting story, well written, i didnt see to many grammer mistakes, only a couple here and there. but otherwise good job.

oh, its just the way you said the names that made it confuzing, ok well i hope it gets explained later, so yea post chapter 2

there are some gramatical errors, but nothing major, pretty cool start, how come the sisters have different last names?

fluid or not, it gets its point across, she read some crappy writing and she doesnt want to tell the person they suck, cuz that would be cruel so she ...

reading this brought a large smile to my face, very very good job, shadow kill some soldiers and have fun, what exactaly is shadow?

very nice additon, jennafina, keep it up.

yes continue, this shows some great potential, poor ugrub, i used to have a rock collection, now that i think about it i still have it lol.